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2017-03-22 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Around the world we can find people enjoy dangerous sports or activities. In my opinion, they do for their achievement or be delighted to join in the competitions. Allow me to expound. At first, What kinds of dangerous sports can we find in these days? Maybe, the answers could be selfie on top of the high-rise building, UFC, climbing on rock face and many other things. These sports are actually very dangerous if something goes wrong it would lead to death. The first reason why people do these activities is because of an achievement. For instance, moving up on top of the high-rise building and taking a selfie is not normal behaviors they will sense of accomplishment that release endorphines. This thrilling will allow them to last the experience in their memory. Secondly, people like biologically a competition because so that we can make for a living; stock investors earn by others failure, company earn more money beating the rivals. An educated courage by parents and teachers boost their greed up in competitions. One of very competitive sports is UFC. Most numerous of men want to be strong and powerful. UFC is the stage they can show their power. In this stage a courage and a competitive personality help them to be win. The thrilling also make someone strive to be the champion even It takes risk. To wrap up, the first reason why people do dangerous sports is for their achievement. And, The second reason is their biological competitive spirit.

강사 첨삭

Hello Larry! ^^


Thank you for expressing your opinion.


All good things,

==Teacher Charlie==


Around the world we can find people enjoy dangerous sports or activities. In my opinion, they do for their achievement or be delighted to join in the competitions. Allow me to expound. 
At first, What kinds of dangerous sports can we find in these days? Maybe, the answers could be selfie on top of the high-rise building, UFC, climbing on rock face and many other things. These sports are actually very dangerous if something goes wrong it would lead to death. The first reason why people do these activities is because of an achievement. For instance, moving up on top of the high-rise building and taking a selfie is not normal behaviors they will sense of accomplishment that release endorphines. This thrilling will allow them to last the experience in their memory.
>> In my point of view, people around the world enjoy and are attracted to dangerous sports and activities because they delight in joining competitions and feel a sense of achievement.

What dangerous sports and activities am I referring to? I\'m referring to taking \"selfies\" on top of high-rise buildings, rock climbing, and other risky activities that have a possibility of ending in tragedies. Like I mentioned earlier, people dare to do these dangerous activities  to get the sense of achievement or to get an \"endorphin high\" since doing these activities is not commonly done. We could also call these kinds of people as \"thrill seekers\".


 Secondly, people like biologically a competition because so that we can make for a living; stock investors earn by others failure, company earn more money beating the rivals. An educated courage by parents and teachers boost their greed up in competitions. One of very competitive sports is UFC. Most numerous of men want to be strong and powerful. UFC is the stage they can show their power. In this stage a courage and a competitive personality help them to be win. The thrilling also make someone strive to be the champion even It takes risk.
>> Aside from participating in dangerous activities, people also delight in joining competitions because it we live in a dog eat dog world where from simple school competitions to our jobs to big conglomerates vie to be the best. One of the most competitive dangerous sport is the UFC where men and women fight with barely no protection just to prove how strong and powerful they are. The sport is risky but the thrill of the sport is quite present there.


 To wrap up, the first reason why people do dangerous sports is for their achievement. And, The second reason is their biological competitive spirit.

>> In conclusion, some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities because of two main reasons: the thrill of competing as well as the need to get the sense of achievement. 

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