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2017-11-10 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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Q. What assignment was too difficult for you, and how did you resolve the issue? The most difficult assignment in my college was to make a air conditioner with the group of students. It was a team project that everyone had to participate in. Though my team designed the plan well with specific details, it was way too much with given budget. So we had to change the plan within the budget. My team has come to the simple conclusion that the air conditioner’s principle. It is based on using electric fan with filter. At last, my team was able to finish the project with good score. All work done well.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!
Thank you for another great composition.
Keep expressing yourself.
We will practice this answer in class.
Have a good day!
~~ Teacher Sharon
The most difficult assignment in my college was to make a air conditioner with the group of students.
>> The most difficult assignment in my college was to make an air conditioner with a group of students.
It was a team project that everyone had to participate in.
>> Correct
Though my team designed the plan well with specific details, it was way too much with given budget.
>> Though my team designed the plan well with specific details, it was way too much with the given budget.
So we had to change the plan within the budget.
>> So we had to change the plan to fit the budget.
My team has come to the simple conclusion that the air conditioner’s principle. It is based on using electric fan with filter.
>> My team had come to the simple conclusion that the air conditioner’s principle is based on using an electric fan with a filter.
At last, my team was able to finish the project with good score. All work done well.
>> At last, my team was able to finish the project with a good score.
All work done well.
>> All in all, we did a pretty good job!

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