HW
학생이 쓴 원문
ESSAY: If you are to select a number of objects to represent life in the 21st century, what objects would you choose and why?
The represent object in the 21st century is smartphone.
The smart phone makes people more active and progressive.
First, political part, people make big change.
One day, the small table PC was found, the corruption spread quickly through the samrtphone. People recruited rallies on their smartphones and finally the president was impeached.
It is a very comparable case to the 5.18 democratization movement in 1980.
Second, social part, people can communicate with people who live in abroad through SNS. people can login instagram,facebook, twitter ect through smartphone anywhere.
To summarize, people share imformation quickly through smartphones and live in 21st century
강사 첨삭
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~Teacher Irene~
ESSAY: If you are to select a number of objects to represent life in the 21st century, what objects would you choose and why?
The represent object in the 21st century is smartphone.
>>> The object that, I think, will represent the 21st century is the smartphone.
The smart phone makes people more active and progressive.
>>> Correct.
First, political part, people make big change.
>>> First, in the political area, this gadget made big changes.
One day, the small table PC was found, the corruption spread quickly through the samrtphone.
>>> When the small table PC was introduced, corruptions spread quickly though the smartphone.
People recruited rallies on their smartphones and finally the president was impeached.
>>> People/Parties recruited people to rally on the streets using the smartphone leading to the impeachment of the president at that time.
It is a very comparable case to the 5.18 democratization movement in 1980.
>>> You can compare the big difference to what happened during the 1980 democratic movement.
Second, social part, people can communicate with people who live in abroad through SNS. people can login instagram,facebook, twitter ect through smartphone anywhere.
>>>Second, the society can easily communicate now. People can easily talk with others who are living abroad through SNS.
people can login instagram, facebook, twitter ect through smartphone anywhere.
>>> People can also use social networks like instagram, Facebook, twitter, and others anywhere.
To summarize, people share imformation quickly through smartphones and live in 21st century
>>> To summarize this, people share information quickly through smartphones in the 21st century
~Teacher Irene~
ESSAY: If you are to select a number of objects to represent life in the 21st century, what objects would you choose and why?
The represent object in the 21st century is smartphone.
>>> The object that, I think, will represent the 21st century is the smartphone.
The smart phone makes people more active and progressive.
>>> Correct.
First, political part, people make big change.
>>> First, in the political area, this gadget made big changes.
One day, the small table PC was found, the corruption spread quickly through the samrtphone.
>>> When the small table PC was introduced, corruptions spread quickly though the smartphone.
People recruited rallies on their smartphones and finally the president was impeached.
>>> People/Parties recruited people to rally on the streets using the smartphone leading to the impeachment of the president at that time.
It is a very comparable case to the 5.18 democratization movement in 1980.
>>> You can compare the big difference to what happened during the 1980 democratic movement.
Second, social part, people can communicate with people who live in abroad through SNS. people can login instagram,facebook, twitter ect through smartphone anywhere.
>>>Second, the society can easily communicate now. People can easily talk with others who are living abroad through SNS.
people can login instagram, facebook, twitter ect through smartphone anywhere.
>>> People can also use social networks like instagram, Facebook, twitter, and others anywhere.
To summarize, people share imformation quickly through smartphones and live in 21st century
>>> To summarize this, people share information quickly through smartphones in the 21st century
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