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2019-04-08 · 첨삭 강사 Irene

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it is hard to control for teenagers since they are like little adults. They have own ideas. they have independants so they wish to do thenselves it is easy to control for children because they don\'t have much ideas. For instance, if you give them a piece of chocolates, they would follow you. they need a lot of help even go to toilet. most of Korean teenagers usually respect old people. In my case, when I was a teenager, I respected my teachers and parents. Because I learned from old people saying elderly people took care of me. teenagers are same regardless of generation. They are independents and brave Teenagers are usually pursue their dream without limitation. They don\'t have lots of considerations about money or time one of the important things to them is pride. old people have a lot of considerations in order to do something special. Because they had been went through for failure and have a responsibility about their family I prefer wet weather, because I like rain

강사 첨삭

Thanks Kelly! ^_^

~T. Irene~

it is hard to control for teenagers since they are like little adults.

>>>  It is hard to control teenagers since they are like little adults.
 They have own ideas.

>>>  They have their own ideas.

they have independants so they wish to do thenselves

>>>  They are independent and wish to do things by themselves.
 it is easy to control for children because they don\'t have much ideas.

>>>  It is easier to control young children because they don\'t have much ideas yet.
 For instance, if you give them a piece of chocolates, they would follow you.

>>>  Correct.
 they need a lot of help even go to toilet.

>>>  They need a lot of help even as simple as going to the toilet.
 most of Korean teenagers usually respect old people.

>>>  Korean teenagers are taught to respect old people.
 In my case, when I was a teenager, I respected my teachers and parents.

>>>  Correct.
 Because I learned from old people saying elderly people took care of me.

>>>  I learned a lot from these old people and they really took good care of me.
 teenagers are same regardless of generation.

>>>  I believe that teenagers are all the same regardless of their generation.
 They are independents and brave

>>>  They are independent and brave.
 Teenagers are usually pursue their dream without limitation.

>>>  Teenagers nowadays, pursue their dreams without hesitations.

They don\'t have lots of considerations about money or time one of the important things to them is pride.

>>>  They are not conscious about money and/or time.  They focus on their goal and their pride.
 old people have a lot of considerations in order to do something special.

>>>  On the other hand, old people usually have to consider a lot of things first before doing something special.
 Because they had been went through for failure and have a responsibility about their family

>>>  Because they have been through a lot of failures already and they are responsible for their family.
 I prefer wet weather, because I like rain

>>>  I prefer the wet weather because I like the rain.

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