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2019-04-08 · 첨삭 강사 Irene

학생이 쓴 원문

it is nice looking outside raining. There are a variety of weathers in summer, raining,sunny and even windy. my hometown seoul, the capital of Korea has four seasons, spring,summer,fall, and winter. In spring and fall, people usually enjoy outing because of nice weather. In summer, those who want to avoid sun go swimming pool or enjoy inside entertainment lastly in winter, general people stay in a home in order to protect a cold. The university which I wanted to enroll in required me to get a good score in mathematics. After that, I realized that I felt a sense of accomplishment when I solved the hard questions. I seem to enjoy solving complicated questions. There is a strong relation between mathematics and nursing, so I am able to apply the subject in my field That is the reason I become interested in the subject nowadays. Although I studied the subjects for short times, I am able to talk about those fields since I had been went through those experiences.

강사 첨삭

Another one Kelly! ^_^

~. T. Irene ~

it is nice looking outside raining.

>>> It is nice to look outside when it is raining.
 There are a variety of weathers in summer, raining,sunny and even windy.

>>>  There are different kinds of weather conditions during the summer season: sunny, rainy and windy.     
 my hometown seoul, the capital of Korea has four seasons, spring,summer,fall, and winter.

>>> There are four seasons in my hometown, Seoul. These are spring, summer, fall, and winter.
 In spring and fall, people usually enjoy outing because of nice weather.

>>> In spring and fall seasons, people usually enjoy going out because of the nice weather.   
 In summer, those who want to avoid sun go swimming pool or enjoy inside entertainment

>>> During the summer season, those who want to avoid exposure to the sun go the indoor swimming pools or do some indoor entertainment.    
 lastly in winter, general people stay in a home in order to protect a cold.

>>> Lastly, during the winter season, most people stay at home to protect themselves from the bitter cold.     
 The university which I wanted to enroll in required me to get a good score in mathematics.

>>> The university I wanted to enroll in required me to get a good score in mathematics. 
 After that, I realized that I felt a sense of accomplishment when I solved the hard questions.

>>>  Correct.
 I seem to enjoy solving complicated questions.

>>>  Correct. 
 There is a strong relation between mathematics and nursing, so I am able to apply the subject in my field

>>>  Correct. 
 That is the reason I become interested in the subject nowadays.

>>>    That is the reason I became interested in the subject nowadays. 
 Although I studied the subjects for short times, I am able to talk about those fields since I had been went through those experiences.

>>>  Although I studied the subjects for short times, I was able to talk about those fields since I went through those experiences.   

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