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2019-04-08 · 첨삭 강사 Irene

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I usually save photos on my phone. I always bring my smartphone, so I can easily see those photos anytime at anywhere. I like to take the pictures of the landscape. he was work for 40 years and retired 3years ago. Even though his friends had been working, he remained unemployed at that time. There are a variety of well-paid jobs in the society, such as doctors, lawyers and even artist. they are deserving because they have been working hard. it is hard for robots to work with detail. I like city where there are a lot of convenient things around. the place is a famous city for its foods. I can easily find materials for studying I usually study English in the library there are a lot of trees surrounding the library every meal time, I have to go outside. you are not likely to focus on your study. because teenagers have independence, they wish to do everything without help. teenagers have a high intellectual level, so it is easy to control them.

강사 첨삭

One more to go Kelly! ^_^

~. T. Irene~

I usually save photos on my phone.

>>>  Correct.   

I always bring my smartphone so I can easily see those photos anytime at anywhere.

>>>  I always bring my smartphone so I can easily see those photos anytime and anywhere.

>>> I always bring my smartphone so I can easily see those photos anytime, anywhere.
 I like to take the pictures of the landscape.

>>>  I like taking pictures of the landscape.    
 he was work for 40 years and retired 3years ago.

>>> He worked for 40 years and just retired 3 years ago.
 Even though his friends had been working, he remained unemployed at that time.

>>> Even when his friends were already working, he remained unemployed at that time.
 There are a variety of well-paid jobs in the society, such as doctors, lawyers and even artist.

>>>   There are a variety of well-paid jobs in the society, such as doctors, lawyers and even artists.     

they are deserving because they have been working hard.

>>> These professionals deserve it because they worked hard. 
 it is hard for robots to work with detail.

>>> It will be hard for robots to work with precise details.     
 I like city where there are a lot of convenient things around.

>>> I like living in the city where there are a lot of convenient things to do.    
 the place is a famous city for its foods.

>>>  The city is a famous place for good food.    
 I can easily find materials for studying

>>> Correct.      
 I usually study English in the library.

>>> Correct.   
 There are a lot of trees surrounding the library.

>>> Correct.     
Every meal time, I have to go outside.

>>> Correct.   

>>>  Every meal time, I have to go out.
You are not likely to focus on your study.

>>> Correct.    
 because teenagers have independence, they wish to do everything without help.

>>> Teenagers are very independent such that they don\'t wish any help in whatever they are doing.      
 teenagers have a high intellectual level, so it is easy to control them.

>>>  Teenagers are highly intellectual so it\'s easy control  (teach) them.   

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