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2019-04-09 · 첨삭 강사 Irene

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she was cute so I wanted to be like her. those who are interest in movies like superstar, while those who are not interest in movies don\'t know who they are. I want to be friends with her. she was a mathematics teacher, but nowadays she works as a fashion designer. her story is very interesting. she desired to be a fashion designer and pursued her dream without hesitations. I would like to know more about her. she\'s name is sujin, a mother of my friend. I would like to make a friend who is a kind. I wish that we have same interests because I enjoy sharing ideas with each other. we are closed to each other. The store is open 24 hours a day. There are three kinds of coffees in my home from other countries. These are brazil,kenya and colombia. The most popular one is kenya\'s coffee. because I don\'t like tea, I only buy coffee. since I woke up early, I need to drink a cup of coffee. the cafe is open 24 hours a day. I am very appreciated her.

강사 첨삭

Hello Kelly!  Here is another one. ^_^

~T. Irene~

She was cute so I wanted to be like her.

>>>   Correct. 

 those who are interest in movies like superstar, while those who are not interest in movies don\'t know who they are.

>>> Those who are interested in movies would probably know who the superstar is while those who are not into films won\'t know the idols.    
 I want to be friends with her.

>>>   Correct. 
 she was a mathematics teacher, but nowadays she works as a fashion designer.

>>>   She used to be a mathematics teacher but nowadays, she works as a  fashion designer.
 Her story is very interesting.

>>>   Correct. 
She desired (dreamt) to be a fashion designer and pursued her dream without hesitations (second thoughts).

>>>   Correct. 
 I would like to know more about her.

>>>   Correct. 
 she\'s name is sujin, a mother of my friend.

>>>  Her name is Sujin. She\'s my friend\'s mom.
 I would like to make a friend who is a kind.

>>>   I would like to have/meet a friend who is a kind.
 I wish that we have same interests because I enjoy sharing ideas with each other.

>>>  I wish that we have same interests because I enjoy sharing ideas with her/him/them.   
 we are closed to each other.

>>>  We are close to each other.   
 The store is open 24 hours a day.

>>>   Correct.   
 There are three kinds of coffees in my home from other countries.

>>> Our coffee at home comes from three different parts of the world.     

These are brazil,kenya and colombia.

>>> We order or buy them from  Brazil, Kenya and Colombia.
 The most popular one is kenya\'s coffee.

>>>   The most popular one is Kenyan coffee.  
 because I don\'t like tea, I only buy coffee.

>>>  I only buy coffee since I don\'t like drinking tea.   
 since I woke up early, I need to drink a cup of coffee.

>>>  Whenever I wake up early in the morning, I needed to drink a cup of coffee.   
The cafe is open 24 hours a day.

>>>   Correct. 
 I am very appreciated her.

>>> I appreciate her help.

>>> I appreciate what she has done.




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