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2019-04-10 · 첨삭 강사 Irene

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she has fair skin and black hair. one of the drawbacks to watch movie is that I sometimes get addictive to watching movies so I can easily lose track of time and important things to do. many people are tend to impulsive. people believed that those things were necessary at that time so they bought them although it was not necessary parents have to consider it that is actually necessary or not for their children. When I was a young, I am a greedy person. so I always asked for my parents. I have not ever had a pet. There are a lot of books in japanese, so I can easily find materials for studying. it is hard to sure that it will improve your language level. I need to pay a lot of money for teacher. I enjoy sharing languages with each other, and also I don\'t need to pay for my friend. some people wear sunglassess for fashion. if you speak small, it is impossible to listen your speech although the contents are really nice.

강사 첨삭

The last in my list! ^_^ Way to go Kelly!

~ T. Irene ~

 She has fair skin and black hair.

>>> Correct.  
 one of the drawbacks to watch movie is that I sometimes get addictive to watching movies so I can easily lose track of time and important things to do.

>>> One of the drawbacks to watching movies for me is that I can get addicted to it so I easily lose track of time and neglect other important things that needs to be done.    
 many people are tend to impulsive.

>>>  Many people tend to be impulsive.  
 people believed that those things were necessary at that time so they bought them although it was not necessary

>>>  People believe that those things were necessary at that time so they bought them though they proved to be useless.  
 parents have to consider it that is actually necessary or not for their children.

>>> Parents have to consider whether it is actually necessary for their children or not.    
 When I was a young, I am a greedy person.

>>> When I was young, I was a greedy person.

so I always asked for my parents.

>>>  I asked a lot of things from my parents.
 I have not ever had a pet.

>>> I never had a pet.   
 There are a lot of books in japanese, so I can easily find materials for studying.

>>> There are a lot of Japanese books so I can easily find materials for studying.    
 it is hard to sure that it will improve your language level.

>>> It will surely improve your language level.   
 I need to pay a lot of money for teacher.

>>> I need to pay a lot of money for a teacher.   
 I enjoy sharing languages with each other, and also I don\'t need to pay for my friend.

>>>  I enjoy sharing languages with others and also I don\'t need to pay my friend.   
Some people wear sunglasses for fashion.

>>> Correct.    
 if you speak small, it is impossible to listen your speech although the contents are really nice.

>>> If you speak softly, it is impossible to hear your speech although the contents may be nice.     


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