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2019-04-10 · 첨삭 강사 Irene

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I think it depends on the importance of an email. if I receive an email about my work, I am likely to reply as soon as possible. however, when I get an email from my friends who want to play with me, I am able to reply when I can afford it there are a lot of advantages to ride a bike and the first one is I can protect the environment. another one is I am likely to be a healthy. train would become the most popular transportation in Korea since it is convenient much more than other transportations. there are a lot of convenient things to do in the train. these are huge places, comfortable seats, and even delicious foods. it is cheaper than a plain. it also helps her to protect herself from the risky. I want to learn to become a success. Adults need to learn becoming a challenging. there are a lot of ways to be motivated to learn new things and the first one is getting do together with friends. if you do with other people, you would have a motivation.

강사 첨삭

Here\'s more Kelly! ^_^

~ T. Irene ~

I think it depends on the importance of an email.

>>> I think it depends on the importance of the email.

>>> I think it depends on the content of the email.
 if I receive an email about my work, I am likely to reply as soon as possible.

>>> If the email is work-related, I would probably reply as soon as possible.  
 however, when I get an email from my friends who want to play with me, I am able to reply when I can afford it

>>> However, if it\'s from my friends who just want to play/hang-out with me, I would reply when I am not busy.
 there are a lot of advantages to ride a bike and the first one is I can protect the environment.

>>> There are a lot of advantages to riding a bike and the first one is that I can protect the environment. 

another one is I am likely to be a healthy.

>>> Another is, it would make me fit and healthy.
 train would become the most popular transportation in Korea since it is convenient much more than other transportations.

>>> The subway system or train system would become the most popular means of transportation in Korea because it is more convenient than the others.
 there are a lot of convenient things to do in the train.

>>> There are a lot of things one can do while riding or onboard the train.

these are huge places, comfortable seats, and even delicious foods.

>>> Trains are spacious with comfortable seats and sometimes they offer delicious foods.
 it is cheaper than a plain.

>>> It is also cheaper than taking a plane.
 it also helps her to protect herself from the risky.

>>> It will also protect her from the risk.
 I want to learn to become a success.

>>> I want to learn how to be successful.
 Adults need to learn becoming a challenging.

>>> Adults need to learn how to take on challenges.
 there are a lot of ways to be motivated to learn new things and the first one is getting do together with friends.

>>> There are a lot of ways to get motivated in learning new things. One is to enjoy doing it with friends.
 if you do with other people, you would have a motivation.

>>> When we do things with other people, we get motivated because we are enjoying what we are doing.

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