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~ T. Irene ~
I think it depends on the importance of an email.
>>> I think it depends on the importance of the email.
>>> I think it depends on the content of the email.
if I receive an email about my work, I am likely to reply as soon as possible.
>>> If the email is work-related, I would probably reply as soon as possible.
however, when I get an email from my friends who want to play with me, I am able to reply when I can afford it
>>> However, if it\'s from my friends who just want to play/hang-out with me, I would reply when I am not busy.
there are a lot of advantages to ride a bike and the first one is I can protect the environment.
>>> There are a lot of advantages to riding a bike and the first one is that I can protect the environment.
another one is I am likely to be a healthy.
>>> Another is, it would make me fit and healthy.
train would become the most popular transportation in Korea since it is convenient much more than other transportations.
>>> The subway system or train system would become the most popular means of transportation in Korea because it is more convenient than the others.
there are a lot of convenient things to do in the train.
>>> There are a lot of things one can do while riding or onboard the train.
these are huge places, comfortable seats, and even delicious foods.
>>> Trains are spacious with comfortable seats and sometimes they offer delicious foods.
it is cheaper than a plain.
>>> It is also cheaper than taking a plane.
it also helps her to protect herself from the risky.
>>> It will also protect her from the risk.
I want to learn to become a success.
>>> I want to learn how to be successful.
Adults need to learn becoming a challenging.
>>> Adults need to learn how to take on challenges.
there are a lot of ways to be motivated to learn new things and the first one is getting do together with friends.
>>> There are a lot of ways to get motivated in learning new things. One is to enjoy doing it with friends.
if you do with other people, you would have a motivation.
>>> When we do things with other people, we get motivated because we are enjoying what we are doing.
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