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2019-04-10 · 첨삭 강사 Irene

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my mom asked me to endure my desire of snacks until after dinner. Even though it was hard for me to have a patient, I tried to have a patient. I don\'t like those who don\'t have a patient since they usually are annoyed to someone who are innocent. those who wanted to take out the foods sometimes didn\'t wait and order to waiter hurry up a work. it was sometimes stressed out. having a patient is sometimes hard for you, but it would be likely to good for you. because all of family members help business, it is possible to save money. another one is low risk of fraud since there is a strong trust between family members. it is hard to get a privacy and they have to share everything in their life. nothing can win the endeavor. these are free shuttle buses, discount some products and even free trip. if you work in a small company, it is difficult to get well-paid it is hard to learn one skill fast. one of the way educating visitors.

강사 첨삭

Hello Kelly! Thank you for putting in a lot of effort in writing down your answers. It\'s a good way to improve. ^_^

~T. Irene~

my mom asked me to endure my desire of snacks until after dinner.

>>> My mom asked me to endure my desire for eating snack before dinner time.    
 Even though it was hard for me to have a patient, I tried to have a patient.

>>> Even though it was hard for me to be patient, I did my best to be one.     
 I don\'t like those who don\'t have a patient since they usually are annoyed to someone who are innocent.

>>> I don\'t like those people who are not patient because they get easily annoyed at innocent ones.    
 those who wanted to take out the foods sometimes didn\'t wait and order to waiter hurry up a work.

>>> In the restaurant, some people are too impatient such that when they order food for a take-out, they demand for the waiter to rush.
 it was sometimes stressed out.

>>> It was sometimes too stressful.    
 having a patient is sometimes hard for you, but it would be likely to good for you.

>>>  Being patient is sometimes hard but it would be good for people.    
 because all of family members help business, it is possible to save money.

>>> Since most family members help in the business, it is possible to save some money.    
 another one is low risk of fraud since there is a strong trust between family members.

>>> Another advantage is the low risk for fraud since there is a strong sense of trust between the family members.    
 it is hard to get a privacy and they have to share everything in their life.

>>> Although, there is a problem regarding privacy since they have to share almost everything.    
 nothing can win the endeavor.

>>> Nothing can be better than this endeavor.     
 these are free shuttle buses, discount some products and even free trip.

>>> Some of them are free shuttle buses, discount to some products and even a free trip.     
If you work in a small company, it is difficult to get well-paid.

>>> Correct.

>>> If you work for a small company, it is difficult to get a good pay.    
 it is hard to learn one skill fast.

>>> It is hard to learn a skill in a very short time.    
 one of the way educating visitors.

>>> One of the ways is by educating visitors.  



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