HW
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What are the benefits of having events that many people around the world are celebrating on the same day? Explain 5-6 sentences.
Well, The advantage of celebrating on the same day is that we can share our joy with anyone living in the world. For exmaple, when christmas comes, we can greeting to any others, saying \"Merry christmas\" on the street. Also, we can sing carols we\'ve already known altogether (with even stranger). Furthermore, there are also beneficial things in social. For instance, people all around the world could be form a whole easily and be a the one on thay day as a global union.
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>>> CORRECT
For exmaple, when christmas comes, we can greeting to any others, saying \"Merry christmas\" on the street.
>>> For example, when Christmas comes, we can greet anyone, saying \"Merry Christmas\" on the street.
Also, we can sing carols we\'ve already known altogether (with even stranger).
>>> CORRECT
Furthermore, there are also beneficial things in social.
>>> Furthermore, it\'s beneficial for our social life.
For instance, people all around the world could be form a whole easily and be a the one on thay day as a global union.
>>> For instance, people all around the world could form a whole easily and be the one on that day as a global union.
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