HW
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Discuss whether or not poverty has an impact on brain development and learning? Explain in 6-7 sentences.
There has consistantly been a hypothesis about that student growing in the poverty has low accomplishment in the academic career and could make a baffling decision when even they grow up as adult.
Some people argue that it is only a prejudice and just poor people could make a good grade when they try to hard.
On the other hand, according to the study, it has been more clearly proven that growing up, poor children get lack of grey matter which is brain part to encourage study and behavior than rich children.
It seems that there is really nurture impact of poverty. In my opinion, If there was not government\'s educational support, overcoming this problems could be difficult because poor poeple have no financial ability for long-term thier plan, they can only care about surviving their life.
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There has consistantly been a hypothesis about that student growing in the poverty has low accomplishment in the academic career and could make a baffling decision when even they grow up as adult.
>>> There is consistently been a hypothesis about that student growth in poverty has low accomplishment in the academic career and could make a baffling decision when even they grow up as an adult.
Some people argue that it is only a prejudice and just poor people could make a good grade when they try to hard.
>>> Some people argue that it is only prejudice and just poor people could make a good grade when they try too hard.
On the other hand, according to the study, it has been more clearly proven that growing up, poor children get lack of grey matter which is brain part to encourage study and behavior than rich children.
>>> On the other hand, according to the study, it has been more clearly proven that growing up, poor children get a lack of grey matter which is the brain part to encourage study and behavior than rich children.
It seems that there is really nurture impact of poverty. In my opinion, If there was not government\'s educational support, overcoming this problems could be difficult because poor poeple have no financial ability for long-term thier plan, they can only care about surviving their life.
>>> It seems that there is really nurture impact of poverty. In my opinion, If there was not government\'s educational support, overcoming this problem could be difficult because poor people have no financial ability for long-term their plan, they can only care about surviving their life.
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