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Do you think overpopulation is an important environmental issue? Why or why not? Explain 7-8 sentences.
Overpopulation is double-edged sword to us. It promotes a lot of economic beneficial things, while it erodes environmental problems.
For the advantages, there are usually a lot of opportunity of job and something interesting such as multi shopping mall and theater with new trends in big cities. And we can meet people and gather easily.
However, the citi becames overcrowded, the amount of gabbage will be overflowed in the city. And also, many people drive their own car so that the quality of air in the city will be polluted. Furthermore, by using gadgets and home appliances, the emisson of carbon dioxide will increase.
So I clearly believe that overpopulation is one of the cause of environmental problems.
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This is a very simple and direct answer.
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~~ Teacher James
Overpopulation is double-edged sword to us. >>> Overpopulation is a double-edged sword for us.
It promotes a lot of economic beneficial things, while it erodes environmental problems.
>>> CORRECT
For the advantages, there are usually a lot of opportunity of job and something interesting such as multi shopping mall and theater with new trends in big cities.
>>> CORRECT
For the advantages, there are usually a lot of opportunity of job and something interesting such as multi shopping mall and theater with new trends in big cities.
>>> For the advantages, there is usually a lot of opportunity of job and something interesting such as a multi shopping mall and theater with new trends in big cities.
And we can meet people and gather easily.
>>> CORRECT
However, the citi becames overcrowded, the amount of gabbage will be overflowed in the city.
>>> CORRECT
However, the citi becames overcrowded, the amount of gabbage will be overflowed in the city.
>>> However, the city became overcrowded, the amount of garbage will be overflowed in the city.
And also, many people drive their own car so that the quality of air in the city will be polluted. Furthermore, by using gadgets and home appliances, the emisson of carbon dioxide will increase.
>>> And also, many people drive their own car so that the quality of air in the city will be polluted. Furthermore, by using gadgets and home appliances, the emissions of carbon dioxide will increase.
>>> And also, many people drive their own car so that the quality of air in the city will be polluted. Furthermore, by using gadgets and home appliances, the emissions of carbon dioxide will increase.
So I clearly believe that overpopulation is one of the cause of environmental problems.
>>> So I clearly believe that overpopulation is one of the causes of environmental problems.
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