HW
학생이 쓴 원문
I think the food has totally improved than before. Plus, Harmful food is also apparently better than without food. Over the past time, we have developed many technologies to food. As a result, we can resolve the problems of food someday. But one thing\'s for sure, we have to try to improve technologies to food.
강사 첨삭
Hi Jay!
Let\'s add in more details.
Give me a variety of examples.
Avoid repeating the same expressions.
You can do it.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I think the food has totally improved than before.
>> I think food has totally improved than before.
Plus, Harmful food is also apparently better than without food.
>> Plus, harmful food is also apparently better.
Over the past time, we have developed many technologies to food.
>> Over time, we have developed many technologies to manufacture food.
As a result, we can resolve the problems of food someday.
>> As a result, we can resolve the food problems someday.
But one thing\'s for sure, we have to try to improve technologies to food.
>> But one thing\'s for sure, we have to try to improve technologies for food.
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