HW
학생이 쓴 원문
I think the new should try to make same amount of positive and negative news. I was usually feeling awful or furious while I am watching the news. It can make people getting pessimistic. The news always create stimulus or critically displeasure stories. Surely, there are also some optimistic and warm news. However, it does not make sense. We have to be explored by happiness and funny news. I hope to change the news to be more optimistic.
강사 첨삭
Hi Jay!
Always be careful of your choice of words.
You can try to find synonyms that would be appropriate in the situation.
I know that you want to try using new terms and expressions.
That is very commendable.
Let\'s just practice some more so that you would choose the right ones.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I think the new should try to make same amount of positive and negative news.
>> I think the news should try to keep a balance between positive and negative news.
I was usually feeling awful or furious while I am watching the news.
>> I usually feel awful or furious when I am watching the news.
It can make people getting pessimistic.
>> It can make people become pessimistic.
The news always create stimulus or critically displeasure stories.
>> The news always creates a stimulus or unpleasant stories.
Surely, there are also some optimistic and warm news.
>> Correct
However, it does not make sense.
>> Correct
We have to be explored by happiness and funny news.
>> We have to explore happiness and funny news.
I hope to change the news to be more optimistic.
>> I hope the news would become more optimistic.
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