HW: Do you believe that the rich are growing richer, and the poor are growing poorer?

2020-06-16 · 첨삭 강사 Rina

학생이 쓴 원문

I agree with that opinion. Especially in Korean society, the gap between the rich and the poor is more acute. The reason is early education. In Korea, They started learning Korean when they were 5 years old, and when they were 7 years old, They entered an English kindergarten and learned English. And They enter elementary school and go to art and sports academy to develop their artistic and physical ability. Therefore, the cost of investing in raising children is enormous. Of course, not all Koreans educate their children like this, but most Koreans educate their children in this pattern. For this reason, children from rich families learn many things and have many opportunities to become as smart as much. However, relatively poor children are not in an environment where they can receive education like rich children.

강사 첨삭

Hello there, Hazel! :)
Education is really important, isn\'t it? :)
I think all Korean students study hard that\'s why you are all smart. :)
Thank you for sharing this. See you tomorrow!

- T. Rina ^^



1. I agree with that opinion. 
>> CORRECT!

2. Especially in Korean society, the gap between the rich and the poor is more acute. 
>> CORRECT!

3. The reason is early education. 
>> CORRECT!

4. In Korea, They started learning Korean when they were 5 years old, and when they were 7 years old, They entered an English kindergarten and learned English. 
>> In Korea, kids start learning Korean when they are 5 years old, and when they are 7 years old, they enter an English kindergarten and learn English. 

5. And They enter elementary school and go to art and sports academy to develop their artistic and physical ability. 
>> And they enter elementary school and go to art and sports academy to develop their artistic and physical abilities.

6. Therefore, the cost of investing in raising children is enormous. 
>> CORRECT!

7. Of course, not all Koreans educate their children like this, but most Koreans educate their children in this pattern. 
>> CORRECT!

8. For this reason, children from rich families learn many things and have many opportunities to become as smart as much. 
>> For this reason, children from rich families learn many things and have many opportunities to be the smartest.

9. However, relatively poor children are not in an environment where they can receive education like rich children.
>> CORRECT!

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