HW) How do elderly people keep fit in your country?
학생이 쓴 원문
As I mentioned, my parents were born in 1950. They are elderly people.
My parents try to exercise such as walking at least 4 days a week.
Nowadays, we often see the healthcare products such as vitamin pills, protein powder etc. on TV.
My parents usually buy these products and try to have lots of nutrition.
What is more important go hospital promptly, when they get sick.
강사 첨삭
Happ, [이름]!
Thank you for doing your homework. ^^ I hope they stay healthy and you get to spend quality time together for a long time. :)
~ Trixia
CONTENT:
As I mentioned, my parents were born in 1950. They are elderly people.
- As I mentioned, my parents were born in 1950, so they are considered elderly.
My parents try to exercise such as walking at least 4 days a week.
- They try to stay healthy by exercising regularly—usually walking at least four days a week.
Nowadays, we often see the healthcare products such as vitamin pills, protein powder etc. on TV.
- Nowadays, we often see healthcare products such as vitamin pills, protein powder, etc., advertised on TV.
My parents usually buy these products and try to have lots of nutrition.
- My parents usually buy these products to boost their nutrition.
What is more important go hospital promptly, when they get sick.
- Most importantly, they visit the hospital promptly whenever they feel sick.
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