HW: How have technological advances affected our life?

2020-08-12 · 첨삭 강사 Rina

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Technology really has a direct impact on our lives, and the pace of technology\'s growth is hard for us to keep up with. It is true that our lives have become much more convenient and simple as technology advances. But there is also a negative side. For example, due to the development of technology, we can acquire information with a few touches of screen, which makes our brain more and more simplified. Therefore, I think we should continue to develop our brains. I think we should prevent the coming of a world where robots dominate us in the distant future. Of course, for this reason, I don\'t think we should stop the development of technology. However, we should try to narrow this gap because our culture, awareness, etc. are not keeping pace with the pace of technological development due to excessive technological advances.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Hazel! ^^
Your vocabulary is outstanding! 
I commend you for using great words and constructing long sentences. ^^

- T.Rina


1. Technology really has a direct impact on our lives, and the pace of technology\'s growth is hard for us to keep up with.
>> CORRECT!

2. It is true that our lives have become much more convenient and simple as technology advances. 
>> CORRECT!

3. But there is also a negative side.
>> CORRECT!

4. For example, due to the development of technology, we can acquire information with a few touches of screen, which makes our brain more and more simplified. 
>> For example, due to the development of technology, we can acquire information with a few touches on screens, which makes our brain more and more simplified. 

5. Therefore, I think we should continue to develop our brains. 
>> CORRECT!

6. I think we should prevent the coming of a world where robots dominate us in the distant future.
>> CORRECT!

7. Of course, for this reason, I don\'t think we should stop the development of technology. 
>> CORRECT!

8. However, we should try to narrow this gap because our culture, awareness, etc. are not keeping pace with the pace of technological development due to excessive technological advances.
>> CORRECT!

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