Hw> How much do you value family ties?
학생이 쓴 원문
Family ties are very important to me because I think family is the beginning of relationships. We learn how to improve and strengthen the relationship by cheering up each other, forgiving their mistakes and understanding their feelings and thoughts. If we don\'t learn those kind of things from our family, it\'s hard to have healthy relationships with people. And family ties should be considered not fixed goals but the process we have to keep trying. Family is also one of the relationships, so if we don\'t pay attention to family ties, it can be broken even if we share blood. And the broken family relationship can change people\'s lives completely(not in a good way). Therefore, we have to keep trying to value family ties together.
강사 첨삭
Hello Ella. Thank you for this. Yes, family relation is very important. We have to value it and mend it.
- T. Beth
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Family ties are very important to me because I think family is the beginning of relationships. >>> correct
We learn how to improve and strengthen the relationship by cheering up each other, forgiving their mistakes and understanding their feelings and thoughts.
>>> correct
>>> OR: We learn how to improve and strengthen the relationship by cheering each other up, forgiving their mistakes and understanding their feelings and thoughts.
If we don\'t learn those kind of things from our family, it\'s hard to have healthy relationships with people.
>>> correct
And family ties should be considered not fixed goals but the process we have to keep trying.
>>> correct
Family is also one of the relationships, so if we don\'t pay attention to family ties, it can be broken even if we share blood.
>>> correct
And the broken family relationship can change people\'s lives completely(not in a good way).
>>> correct
>>> OR: Moreover, the broken family relationship can completely change people\'s lives completely negatively.
Therefore, we have to keep trying to value family ties together.
>>> correct
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