Hw> What do you like the most about traveling?
학생이 쓴 원문
Being able to enjoy the moment is my favorite thing about traveling. In my daily life, I have a lot of responsibilities. I try to cope with problems and goals well, but sometimes, things don\'t work out the way I wish to go and then I feel things are too much for me. And it keeps me out of focus at this moment and I feel depressed. And I think this won\'t just happen to me.
However, when I travel to somewhere, I can forget my worries and responsibilities in my daily life. I feel that I left my worries in my home so I start to focus on the beautiful building or wonderful landscape I am looking at right now while traveling. Of course, traveling itself doesn\'t solve my problems, but it gives me power to go through the situation and makes me refreshed by teaching the ability to enjoy the moment. Some people can say traveling loses time, money, or the things that we have to do \"right now\". But sometimes, I believe rest can do more than work.
강사 첨삭
Hello Ella! Thank you for this. I agree with you, when you feel tired and burned out, taking a rest could be of a big help. Then you continue with what you needed to do. Take a rest if you must, but never quit. Diligence is important, but self-care is also very important.
- T. Beth
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Being able to enjoy the moment is my favorite thing about traveling. >>> correct
In my daily life, I have a lot of responsibilities.
>>> correct
I try to cope with problems and goals well, but sometimes, things don\'t work out the way I wish to go and then I feel things are too much for me.
>>> OR: I try to cope with problems and goals well, but sometimes, things don\'t work out the way I wish them to go then I feel things are too much for me.
And it keeps me out of focus at this moment and I feel depressed. And I think this won\'t just happen to me.
>>> OR: It then keeps me out of focus at this moment and I feel depressed and think this won\'t just happen to me.
>>> OR: Moreover, it keeps me out of focus at this moment and I feel depressed. Then I think this won\'t just happen to me.
However, when I travel to somewhere, I can forget my worries and responsibilities in my daily life.
>>> correct
>>> OR: However, when I travel somewhere, I can forget about my worries and responsibilities in my daily life.
I feel that I left my worries in my home so I start to focus on the beautiful building or wonderful landscape I am looking at right now while traveling.
>>> correct
Of course, traveling itself doesn\'t solve my problems, but it gives me power to go through the situation and makes me refreshed by teaching the ability to enjoy the moment.
>>> correct
Some people can say traveling loses time, money, or the things that we have to do \"right now\".
>>> correct
But sometimes, I believe rest can do more than work.
>>> correct
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