Hw> What do you think is the biggest change in how families are in your country?
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I think filial duty, being good to parents, collapse in Korea. There are many causes about the breakdown of the family system. The main reason is because the society changed. Children used to take care of their elderly parents, but as young people move to the city, it weakens the family system. And individualism and materialism were not welcome because of the Confucian ideas, but nowadays they are encouraged because we are living under the capitalistic system. And that resulted in the collapse of filial duty and it makes conflict and indifference by the lack of communication. I think it\'s serious because a family strife can cause a serious social problem. Therefore, I think we have to keep trying to strengthen the family system!
강사 첨삭
Hello Ella. Thank you for this. I agree with you, we should strengthen family ties. A good family relationship creates a better society for people to live in.
- T. Beth
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I think filial duty, being good to parents, collapse in Korea. >>> I think filial duty, being good to parents, has collapsed in Korea.
There are many causes about the breakdown of the family system.
>>> OR: There are many reasons for the breakdown of the family system.
The main reason is because the society changed.
>>> correct
Children used to take care of their elderly parents, but as young people move to the city, it weakens the family system.
>>> correct
And individualism and materialism were not welcome because of the Confucian ideas, but nowadays they are encouraged because we are living under the capitalistic system.
>>> correct
And that resulted in the collapse of filial duty and it makes conflict and indifference by the lack of communication.
>>> OR: And that resulted in the collapse of filial duty and it creates conflict and indifference through lack of communication.
I think it\'s serious because a family strife can cause a serious social problem.
>>> correct
Therefore, I think we have to keep trying to strengthen the family system!
>>> correct
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