Hw> When do you prefer having a family gathering?

2020-09-17 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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I prefer having a family gathering in summer. Because in summer, we get together with many relatives for a family reunion. Some are living in foreign countries such as France, Vietnam and some are living in Korea but far from each other. So, we can have a reunion in summer vacation, or after the first half year. Another reason is that we can have more activities to do in summer than in winter. We borrowed and rode a quandem at the park, caught marsh snails and fish in the stream, and went to movie theater, temples, swimming pool, or valley. Those activities remain very special memories for me and my family and they strengthen our family bond and make me feel involved. I couldn\'t enjoy summer with my family in this year, but I wish I could have great time with my family next summer!

강사 첨삭

Hello Ella! Thank you for this. These memories are treasures we can keep with us until we grow old. I hope you have more great memories with them.
- T. Beth
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I prefer having a family gathering in summer. 
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Because in summer, we get together with many relatives for a family reunion. 
>>> correct   
Some are living in foreign countries such as France, Vietnam and some are living in Korea but far from each other. 
>>> correct   
So, we can have a reunion in summer vacation, or after the first half year. 
>>> So, we can have a reunion on summer vacations, or after the first half of the year.    
Another reason is that we can have more activities to do in summer than in winter. 
>>> correct   
We borrowed and rode a quandem at the park, caught marsh snails and fish in the stream, and went to movie theater, temples, swimming pool, or valley. 
>>> OR: We borrowed and rode a quandem at the park, caught marsh snails and fish in the stream, then went to the movie theater, temples, swimming pool, or valley.   
Those activities remain very special memories for me and my family and they strengthen our family bond and make me feel involved. 
>>> correct   
I couldn\'t enjoy summer with my family in this year, but I wish I could have great time with my family next summer!
>>>  I couldn\'t enjoy summer with my family this year, but I wish I could have a great time with my family next summer!  

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