HW11

2018-10-18 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

I think 'Seohee' is the wisest person in the history of Korea. When I was a middle school student, I learned the history about Korea. I thought it was boring so I was not interested in that subject. But I can remember that 'Seohee' was good at persuasion and made an amazing result in negotiation about territory with China. In the past, territory was so important to people and there were so many wars and arguments for that. It could occur a lot of sacrifices like lives, cultures, and constructions. In this view, it was surprising that 'Seohee' took territories from China without wars. Thus, I can learn from this example that words can make amazing results. But, we also have to know that, like words can make amazing results, some words can be a knife which can kill someone's mind. So we must concern that whether it can hurt someone whenever we start talking.

강사 첨삭

Hey Jay!(\",)

You are right! Words can be sweet like honey but it can also be like a knife that can cut someone\'s heart. Like you said, we must be careful of what we say and nowadays post on Facebook, Twitter or Instagram. Talk to you later!(\",)

~T. Lynn

I think \'Seohee\' is the wisest person in the history of Korea.

>> correct!

When I was a middle school student, I learned the history about Korea.

>> When I was a middle school student, I learned about the history of Korea.

I thought it was boring so I was not interested in that subject.

>> correct!

But I can remember that \'Seohee\' was good at persuasion and made an amazing result in negotiation about territory with China.

>> correct!

In the past, territory was so important to people and there were so many wars and arguments for that.

>> correct!

It could occur a lot of sacrifices like lives, cultures, and constructions.

>> It could sacrifice a lot like lives, cultures and infrastructures.

In this view, it was surprising that \'Seohee\' took territories from China without wars.

>> In this view, it was surprising that Seohee was able to take territories from China without going to war.

Thus, I can learn from this example that words can make amazing results.

>> correct!

But, we also have to know that, like words can make amazing results, some words can be a knife which can kill someone\'s mind.

>> correct!

So we must concern that whether it can hurt someone whenever we start talking.

>> So we must be careful of what we say because whatever we say might hurt someone.

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