HW11
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hey Jay!(\",)
You are right! Words can be sweet like honey but it can also be like a knife that can cut someone\'s heart. Like you said, we must be careful of what we say and nowadays post on Facebook, Twitter or Instagram. Talk to you later!(\",)
~T. Lynn
I think \'Seohee\' is the wisest person in the history of Korea.
>> correct!
When I was a middle school student, I learned the history about Korea.
>> When I was a middle school student, I learned about the history of Korea.
I thought it was boring so I was not interested in that subject.
>> correct!
But I can remember that \'Seohee\' was good at persuasion and made an amazing result in negotiation about territory with China.
>> correct!
In the past, territory was so important to people and there were so many wars and arguments for that.
>> correct!
It could occur a lot of sacrifices like lives, cultures, and constructions.
>> It could sacrifice a lot like lives, cultures and infrastructures.
In this view, it was surprising that \'Seohee\' took territories from China without wars.
>> In this view, it was surprising that Seohee was able to take territories from China without going to war.
Thus, I can learn from this example that words can make amazing results.
>> correct!
But, we also have to know that, like words can make amazing results, some words can be a knife which can kill someone\'s mind.
>> correct!
So we must concern that whether it can hurt someone whenever we start talking.
>> So we must be careful of what we say because whatever we say might hurt someone.
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