HW12

2018-10-22 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

There are many standards for happy because we have different priority. In my opinion, people have to get rid of greed from their minds. Greed can be a reason for many troubles like fighting because of possession. There must be a fighting if two greedy man met each other. But if there is at least one man who is not greedy, they will not fight because of possession. Like this example, it is important to know that there will not be arguments or fightings around you as long as you tend not to be greedy.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Jay!(\",)
I agree. If love of money is the root of all evil, I think it\'s because humans are mostly greedy. They are never satisfied with what they have. I think if we are satisfied with whatever is given to us, then we will be truly be happy.
~T. Lynn
There are many standards for happy because we have different priority.
>> There are many standards for happiness because we have different priorities.
In my opinion, people have to get rid of greed from their minds.
>> correct!
Greed can be a reason for many troubles like fighting because of possession.
>> correct!
There must be a fighting if two greedy man met each other.
>> There might be a fight if two greedy men meet each other.
But if there is at least one man who is not greedy, they will not fight because of possession.
>> correct!
Like this example, it is important to know that there will not be arguments or fightings around you as long as you tend not to be greedy.
>> correct!

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