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2018-10-29 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

I thought about the school uniform when I was in high school because I wondered why we have to wear uniform. And then, I found some rational reasons why the uniform has to exist. First, we don't know who is rich or poor guy because they all are wearing same clothes. It is important to deal with difference between rich and poor. Teenagers tend to be affected by something easily like money, appearance, and score. Second, it is good for making identity among them. They can feel something like relationship while they are wearing same clothes. Although I think the clothe is very good way to express their own style and individuality, but clothe can also make people get sense of belonging in their groups.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Jay!(\",)

For me wearing a uniform is as simple as showing you belong to a certain school or university. When you have a uniform, it\'s not a hassle to think what to wear every day.(\",)

~T. Lynn

I thought about the school uniform when I was in high school because I wondered why we have to wear uniform.

>> correct!

And then, I found some rational reasons why the uniform has to exist.

>> correct!

 First, we don\'t know who is rich or poor guy because they all are wearing same clothes.

>> First, we don\'t know who is rich or poor because they are all wearing the same clothes.

It is important to deal with difference between rich and poor.

>> It is important to deal with the difference between the rich and the poor.

Teenagers tend to be affected by something easily like money, appearance, and score.

>> correct!

Second, it is good for making identity among them.

>> Second, it is a good way of making an identity among themselves.

They can feel something like relationship while they are wearing same clothes.

>> They can feel something like a relationship while they are wearing the same clothes.

 Although I think the clothe is very good way to express their own style and individuality, but clothe can also make people get sense of belonging in their groups.

>> Although I think clothes could be a good way to express their own style and individuality, clothes can also make people get a sense of belongingness within their groups.

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