HW14
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello, Jay!(\",)
For me wearing a uniform is as simple as showing you belong to a certain school or university. When you have a uniform, it\'s not a hassle to think what to wear every day.(\",)
~T. Lynn
I thought about the school uniform when I was in high school because I wondered why we have to wear uniform.
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And then, I found some rational reasons why the uniform has to exist.
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First, we don\'t know who is rich or poor guy because they all are wearing same clothes.
>> First, we don\'t know who is rich or poor because they are all wearing the same clothes.
It is important to deal with difference between rich and poor.
>> It is important to deal with the difference between the rich and the poor.
Teenagers tend to be affected by something easily like money, appearance, and score.
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Second, it is good for making identity among them.
>> Second, it is a good way of making an identity among themselves.
They can feel something like relationship while they are wearing same clothes.
>> They can feel something like a relationship while they are wearing the same clothes.
Although I think the clothe is very good way to express their own style and individuality, but clothe can also make people get sense of belonging in their groups.
>> Although I think clothes could be a good way to express their own style and individuality, clothes can also make people get a sense of belongingness within their groups.
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