HW21

2018-11-06 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

There are so many policies about companies to prosper economy. For example, there is a policy to support small business and it gives money to both of the company and worker. But this policy can be applied to them in a special condition, the employee has to work in that company for three years. If this condition is satified, both of the company and worker can acheive money from the government. It is a method to reduce the gap between big business and small business. Like this policy, there are many good policies to invest company. Thus, I think the government should invest and encourage many companies with good policies, but it is important to give conditions for the polcies prevent abusing.

강사 첨삭

Jay,

I heard about your government\'s economic policy. I hope it will be effective since it\'s the major concern now in your country. You did a good job today. keep it up!(\",)

~Lynn

There are so many policies about companies to prosper economy.

>> There are so many policies helping companies to prosper and in turn it will help our economy.

For example, there is a policy to support small business and it gives money to both of the company and worker.

>> For example, there is a policy to support small businesses and it gives money to both the company and the workers. 

But this policy can be applied to them in a special condition, the employee has to work in that company for three years.

>> correct!

If this condition is satisfied, both of the company and worker can acheive money from the government.

>> If this condition is satisfied, both the company and the worker can get money from the government.

 It is a method to reduce the gap between big business and small business.

>> It is a method to reduce the gap between big businesses and small businesses.

 Like this policy, there are many good policies to invest company.

>> Like this policy, there are other good policies in investing in a company.

Thus, I think the government should invest and encourage many companies with good policies, but it is important to give conditions for the polcies prevent abusing.

>> Thus, I think the government should invest and encourage many companies with good policies, but it is also important to set conditions to prevent them from abusing it.

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