HW24
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강사 첨삭
Hi there Jay!(\",)
Things that people only imagined in the past are now a reality for us. I can\'t imagine what tomorrow will bring. Can you?
~T. Lynn
Like what I said about fourth industrial revolution, there are already a lot of development in network.
>> Like what I said about the fourth industrial revolution, there are already a lot of developments in the internet.
About 10 years ago, actually, there was a corded telephone in my house but, now, it is useless because of mobile phone.
>> About 10 years ago, actually, there was a corded telephone in my house but, now it is useless because of mobile phones.
I think our lives have became more convinient by network technic.
>> I think our lives have been more convenient because of the web.
It is also easier to keep in touch with friends or coworkers.
>> correct!
In the past, we had to send an e-mail or call to someone who are living far from us.
>> correct!
However, it is possible to connect with them easily by just sending Kakao-talk messages.
>> However, now it is possible to connect with them easily by just sending Kakao-talk messages.
Also, there are so many people who use web conference technics like me.
>> correct!
I can learn English in Korea from you living in Philippines.
>> I can learn English in Korea from you who is living in the Philippines.
From this technic, people can work or learn something regardless of time and place.
>> correct!
I expect more development in every industries because people can exchange their opinions fast by the internet.
>> I expect more development in every industry because people can exchange their opinions fast through the internet.
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