HW25
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hey Jay,
I played hide and seek, tag, hopscotch and many other outdoor games when I was a kid. I even climbed trees. I don\'t see children doing that nowadays in our country. It\'s kinda sad.
~T. Lynn
These days, there are more and more children who like playing internet game more than playing outside with their friends compared to the past.
>> These days, there are more and more children who like playing internet games more than playing outside with their friends compared to the past.
Just when I was am elementary school student, children of my ages played outside doing like \"Police and Thief\", \"Jungle gym\", and \"Mugungwha game\" etc.
>> Just like when I was an elementary school student, children of my age played outside like \"Police and Thief\", \"Jungle gym\" and Mugungwha game\" and others. ( Mugungwha in English is the Rose of Sharon)
I have happy and good feelings in this memories and sometimes I rememorize this because I can get a relaxation.
>> These are happy memories that I wouldn\'t forget and whenever I remember them it gives me a good feeling.
So, I feel sorry for these children because I know that everything has proper time for doing that.
>> So I feel sorry for this children because I know everything has it\'s proper time.
If that time passed away, they won\'t enjoy playing outside with friends.
>> If that time passed by, they won\'t enjoy playing outside with their friends anymore.
I hope that they can get more happy memories in that time.
>> I hope they can get more happy memories while they are young.
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