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2018-11-13 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

In my opinion, talents are innate for something and also can be considered as gift from god. In many areas, talent is so important and necessary for success because there must be exist that can't reach without a talent. However, I want to say that even if people have a talent in something, they won't success without hard effort. Without effort, they can't improve their talent in something. People says "A chance can be acheived by whom is always preparing". It means infinite effort can give a chance for success. There are a lot of people who have a talent in what you think you are good at. In this area, you must be struggling to make your own creative and competitive something to succeed.

강사 첨삭

Hey Jay,

In the Bible, there\'s a passage that says God gives all humans talent. It means you are born with a talent. What would you do with that talent will tell the difference.

~T. Lynn

In my opinion, talents are innate for something and also can be considered as gift from god.

>> In my opinion, talents are innate and is considered to be a gift from God.

In many areas, talent is so important and necessary for success because there must be exist that can\'t reach without a talent.

>> In many areas, talent is so important and necessary for success because there\'s nothing that exist that can be reach without a talent.

However, I want to say that even if people have a talent in something, they won\'t success without hard effort.

>> However, I want to say that even if a person has a talent in something, they won\'t succeed without hard work.

Without effort, they can\'t improve their talent in something.

>> correct!

 People says \"A chance can be acheived by whom is always preparing\".

>> People say, \"A chance can be acheived by whom is always preparing\".

 It means infinite effort can give a chance for success.

>> correct!

There are a lot of people who have a talent in what you think you are good at.

>> There are a lot of people who are talented.

 In this area, you must be struggling to make your own creative and competitive something to succeed.

>> We must struggle to be creative and competitive in order to succeed in something.

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