HW33
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hey Jay,
Many people take the environmental problems for granted. Worldwide awareness is important in dealing with these problems. Self-discipline would help greatly in decreasing our environmental problems.
~Lynn
Actually, I have not thought about environment problems until my military obligation.
>> Actually, I have not thought about environmental problems until my military obligation.
Because I have not experienced of anything weird around my life and also I haven\'t been interested in news.
>> Because I have not experienced anything weird around me and I also haven\'t been interested in the news.
But, I decided to watch news for my future and then, I have watched news and read articles.
>> But, I have decided to watch the news for my future so I started watching the news and reading articles.
I could know that there were many problems like Ozone layer destruction and abnormal climate.
>> I could know that there were many problems like the Ozone layer\'s destruction and the abnormal climate.
I became interested in environment and have had a class about energy and environment in this semester.
>> I became interested in the environment and this semester I have a class about energy and environment.
I learned that there are already many schemes to protect the environment as well as many problems.
>> correct!
I think it is not important to choose what is the main problem of these abnormal climate.
>> I think it is not important to know the main reason of this abnormal climate.
How to deal with and improve this problems is the most important.
>> How to deal with it and solve this problem is the most important.
I\'m majoring in mechanical engineering so I believe I can be a help to handle these problems if I studied my major hard.
>> I\'m majoring in mechanical engineering so I believe I can help in handling these problems if I study my major hard.
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