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학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Jay,
I\'d like to try acupuncture out of curiosity but I\'m afraid of needles. Have you tried it?
~Lynn
I think herbal medicine and acupuncture are similar each other but also different each other.
>> I think herbal medicine and acupuncture are similar to each other but also different.
These two methods are main Oriental medical treatment for a long time.
>> These two methods are the main oriental medical treatment for a long time.
There are many ancient articles about these two methods and they are related each other in the past.
>>There are many ancient articles about these two methods and they are related to each other in the past.
These days, younger people tend to be treated by western medical because of visuable results like CT, x-ray and MRI.
>> These days, younger people tend to be treated by western medicine because of new machines like CT scan, x-ray and MRI.
However, older people tend to be treated by oriental medical for not serious disease.
>> However, older people tend to be treated by oriental medicine for not serious diseases.
I have three friends who is learning about western medical and oriental medical.
>> I have three friends who are learning about western medicine and oriental medicine.
I asked their opinions about these topics in the past,and they said there isn\'t order of priority among them.
>> correct!
Thus, I think it is important to decide where to go with seriousness and types of their disease.
>> Thus, I think it is important to decide where to go based on the seriousness and type of disease.
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