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2018-12-03 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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Thesedays, there are many insane people who have weak mentality. Sometimes, they kill other people ,do the sexual violence and so on. In my opinion, the capital punishiment is an right punishment to them because I hate them to use my money for maintaining their lives. Some people say it is more painful to live in the jail forever, but I think it is just bless to them. If I can, I want to torture them with many painful methodes. I read an articles that the criminal, 조두순, will be out from the jail next year. He did sexual vilolence to only 8 years old girl and killed her. I can\'t understand that this man can come back to society, although he did that crime. If I were acquaintance or family of her, I can\'t bear thoughts to kill him

강사 첨삭

Jay,

I found an article regarding the person you mentioned. It was in Korean but thanks to Google translate, I was able to understand it.(\",) I agree that he shouldn\'t be out of prison this early.

~Lynn

These days, there are many insane people who have weak mentality.

>> correct!

Sometimes, they kill other people , do sexual violence and so on.

>> correct!

In my opinion, the capital punishiment is an right punishment to them because I hate them to use my money for maintaining their lives.

>> In my opinion, the capital punishiment is the right punishment for them because I hate them, they use my money for maintaining their lives.

Some people say it is more painful to live in the jail forever, but I think it is just bless to them.

>> Some people say it is more painful for them to live in the jail forever, but I think it is just a blessing to them.

If I can, I want to torture them with many painful methods.

>> correct!

I read an articles that the criminal, 조두순, will be out from the jail next year.

>> I read in an article that the criminal 조두순 (Jo Soo-soon), will be out from the jail next year.

 He did sexual vilolence to only 8 years old girl and killed her.

>> He violated an 8-year-old girl sexually then killed her.

I can\'t understand that this man can come back to society, although he did that crime.

>> I can\'t understand why this man can get out of jail despite doing that heinous crime.

 If I were acquaintance or family of her, I can\'t bear thoughts to kill him

>> If I was an acquaintance or related to her, I would surely have thoughts of killing him.

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