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강사 첨삭
Jay,
I found an article regarding the person you mentioned. It was in Korean but thanks to Google translate, I was able to understand it.(\",) I agree that he shouldn\'t be out of prison this early.
~Lynn
These days, there are many insane people who have weak mentality.
>> correct!
Sometimes, they kill other people , do sexual violence and so on.
>> correct!
In my opinion, the capital punishiment is an right punishment to them because I hate them to use my money for maintaining their lives.
>> In my opinion, the capital punishiment is the right punishment for them because I hate them, they use my money for maintaining their lives.
Some people say it is more painful to live in the jail forever, but I think it is just bless to them.
>> Some people say it is more painful for them to live in the jail forever, but I think it is just a blessing to them.
If I can, I want to torture them with many painful methods.
>> correct!
I read an articles that the criminal, 조두순, will be out from the jail next year.
>> I read in an article that the criminal 조두순 (Jo Soo-soon), will be out from the jail next year.
He did sexual vilolence to only 8 years old girl and killed her.
>> He violated an 8-year-old girl sexually then killed her.
I can\'t understand that this man can come back to society, although he did that crime.
>> I can\'t understand why this man can get out of jail despite doing that heinous crime.
If I were acquaintance or family of her, I can\'t bear thoughts to kill him
>> If I was an acquaintance or related to her, I would surely have thoughts of killing him.
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