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2018-12-04 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

I have heard "It will be common to rent house in the future because your generation will have many opportunities to go other countries for you work" since I was younger. I agree with these statements, but I think it is option whether buying a house or renting a house with environmental conditions. Now, I think buying a house is better than renting a house because I can feel comfort for possession of my house. Moreoever, it is important to have a house, car and money when I try to ask ladies out on a date. In korea, for men who are over 30 years, people have a pevasive thinking that they have minimum wealth if they want to marry someone. Thus, I will get and save money hard for my future.

강사 첨삭

Jay,

If you want to settle in a certain place, owning a house is the best option. If you are just staying for a while then it\'s better to just rent. But then again, if you have more than enough money, owning a house for investment would be nice.(\",)

~Lynn 

I have heard \"It will be common to rent house in the future because your generation will have many opportunities to go to other countries for you work\" since I was younger.

>> correct!

OR>> Since I was young, people have been telling me that renting will be common in the future since my generation will have more opportunities to work abroad.

I agree with these statements, but I think it is option whether buying a house or renting a house with environmental conditions.

>> I agree with this statement, but I think it is an option whether to buy a house or renting a house with environmental conditions.

Now, I think buying a house is better than renting a house because I can feel comfort for possession of my house.

>> Now, I think buying a house is better than renting because I can feel more comfortable in my own home.

Moreover, it is important to have a house, car and money when I try to ask ladies out on a date.

>> correct!

 In Korea, for men who are over 30 years, people have a pevasive thinking that they have minimum wealth if they want to marry someone.

>>  In Korea, for men who are over 30 years old, people have a pervasive thinking that they  must have minimum wealth if they want to marry someone.

Thus, I will get and save money hard for my future.

>> Thus, I will work hard and save money for my future.

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