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Hey Jay,
Life is supposed to be an adventure. Traveling new places, meeting new people - that\'s the greatest adventure.(\",)
~Lynn
If I have a plan to marry someone, the house is the most important.
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But I am too young to prepare a wedding, so I will choose spending my money for special holiday.
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I always think that experiences are the most important in my life.
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I can learn many things from travels like broad veiwpoints, changing of bias and so on.
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I think it is important to widen veiwpoints in my ages.
>> I think it\'s important to widen my viewpoints at my age.
If I want to succeed in the future, I have to check changing of trend and it could be caught by my broad view points.
>> If I want to succeed in the future, I have to check the changing trend and it could be caught by my broad view points.
In addition,if I have some bias for something,I could miss important things and it would be crucial for my success.
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Thus, traveling around the world can improve me in these points.
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