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2018-12-10 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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There are both advantages and disadvantages of living in the city. In the city, there are many infastructurrs and convinient stores. It is easy to go there because those buildings are near by my house. Also, it takes no long time to go to the hospital in emergency situations. However,there must be disadvantages of living in the city. Above advantages could be alsi disadvangtage because if I have to study hard for exams, there are too many place I want to enjoy. In addition, the raio of crimes in the city is higher than the suburban area. When I am older, I want to live in suburbam area to enjoy peaceful and quite environments. For this lifestyle, I have to do my best in my current life.

강사 첨삭

Jay,

Most people dream of buying a house outside of the city after retirement. I hope you get your wish.(\",)

~Lynn

There are both advantages and disadvantages of living in the city.

>> correct!

In the city, there are many infrastructures and convenient stores.

>> correct!

It is easy to go there because those buildings are near by my house.

>> correct!

Also, it takes no long time to go to the hospital in emergency situations.

>> Also, it doesn\'t take a long time to go to the hospital in emergency situations.

 However, there must be disadvantages of living in the city.

>> correct!

Above advantages could be alsi disadvangtage because if I have to study hard for exams, there are too many place I want to enjoy.

>> The above advantages could be also disadvantages because if I have to study hard for  the exams, there are too many places I want to enjoy.

In addition, the ratio of crimes in the city is higher than the suburban area.

>> In addition, the ratio of crimes in the city is higher than in the suburban area.

When I am older, I want to live in suburbam area to enjoy peaceful and quite environments.

>> When I am older, I want to live in a suburban area to enjoy peaceful and quite environment.

For this lifestyle, I have to do my best in my current life.

>> correct!

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