Hygge

2015-08-04 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

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Denmark ranked the first in happiness index of the world for two years in a row. It rains for over the half of the year and sun shines for only four hours a day in winter. So, The Danish has been ranked the first in the world in taking a medicine for depression. Nontheless, What is the reason that they are on the top of the happiness index in the world? We used a word "Hygge" when we describe attitude of Dannish's life. The Hygge means get along together with relaxed mind and live a satisfied life. Natural or unartificial beauty and enjoy the life of meditation and relaxation with light a candle show their spirit of Hygge. The Hygge also is shown in a social security system. They pay a tax about 48% of their income on average, but they say that they are willing to pay more. Instead, they get free education from kindergarten to university, pay no medical fee, and even supportted living expenses. They are living with a job that matched to their liking and achievement not high salary.

강사 첨삭

Dear [Name]. [이름],

 

A blissful day to you! ^.^

Happy Tuesday! ^,^

 

Thank you for the information about Denmark! ^^

I don\'t really know about this fact.

Thank you very much! ^^,

Because of your composition, I became curious about the criteria they use to come up with the results.

I am still in doubt if the results are reliable.

 

By the way, you told me about \"hygge\" which is a Danish thing.

I think other Filipinos also do it.

My family does it on weekends. ^^

Do you also bring Hygge into your life?

 

Anyway, thank you very much again for the sharing! ^^

Happy reading! ^^,

See you soon! ^^.

 

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

 

 

Denmark ranked the first in happiness index of the world for two years in a row.

>> CORRECT!

It rains for over the half of the year and sun shines for only four hours a day in winter.

>> CORRECT!

So, The Danish has been ranked the first in the world in taking a medicine for depression.

>> So, the Danish have been ranked the first in the world in taking a medicine for depression. (HAS should be HAVE. The T in THE should not be capitalized.)

>> OR: So, the Danes have been ranked the first in the world in taking medication for depression.

Nontheless, What is the reason that they are on the top of the happiness index in the world?

>> Nonetheless, what is the reason that they are on the top of the happiness index in the world. (SPELLING: nonetheless)

>> BETTER: Nonetheless, what is the reason that they were considered as the happiest people in the world.

We used a word \"Hygge\" when we describe attitude of Dannish\'s life.

>> I THINK IT IS BETTER TO SAY: We use the word \"Hygge\" when we describe Danish\'s life.

The Hygge means get along together with relaxed mind and live a satisfied life.

>> I THINK WHAT YOU WANT TO SAY IS: Hygge means getting along with other people with a relaxed mind and living a satisfying life.

>> OR: Hygge means creating a warm atmosphere and enjoying the good things in life with good people.

Natural or unartificial beauty and enjoy the life of meditation and relaxation with light a candle show their spirit of Hygge.

>> Natural or unartificial beauty and enjoyable life with meditation and relaxation with candle lights show the spirit of Hugge. (ENJOY THE LIFE should be ENJOYING LIFE. OF MEDITATION should be WITH MEDITATION. LIGHT A CANDLE is changed into CANDLE LIGHTS. THEIR SPIRIT should be THE SPIRIT.)

The Hygge also is shown in a social security system.

>> CORRECT!

They pay a tax about 48% of their income on average, but they say that they are willing to pay more.

>> They pay a tax which is about 48% of their income on the average, but they say that they are willing to pay more. (PATTERN: on the average or on an average)

Instead, they get free education from kindergarten to university, pay no medical fee, and even supportted living expenses.

>> I THINK WHAT YOU WANT TO SAY IS: Instead, they get free education from kindergarten to university, pay no medical fee, and even get supported for living expenses.

They are living with a job that matched to their liking and achievement not high salary.

>> IT IS BETTER TO SAY: They are living with jobs that are matched to their liking and achievements not high salary.

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