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would like to go the Bhutan and learn a climbing, last one is being in the sky with a paragliding. Nowadays i knew the Bhutan and i heard that is so peaceful country. And the climbing needs using these all body muscles. that would be good for my body. And originally i would like to doing sky diving, but i thought that is danger. So i [이름]ged that to the paragliding.
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Hello [이름]!
Thank you so much for submitting your homework. ^^
I think it would really be nice to see Bhutan and learn more about that country.
Paragliding and climbing are really nice activities.
~Teacher Gina
>> I would like to go to Bhutan and learn climbing then to be in the sky with paragliding.
Nowadays i knew the Bhutan and i heard that is so peaceful country.
>> I recently knew about Bhutan and I heard that it is a very peaceful country.
And the climbing needs using these all body muscles.
>> And we need to use all body muscles in climbing.
That would be good for my body.
>> CORRECT.
And originally i would like to doing sky diving, but i thought that is danger. So i [이름]ged that to the paragliding.
>> Originally, I liked to do sky diving but I thought that it\'s dangerous so I [이름]ged it to paragliding.
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