I agree with Korean age.
학생이 쓴 원문
Korean age is different from international age, so it maybe causes problem sometimes. But, Korean age is Korean tradition. And most of all, it has precious meaning. It is relation with Korean spirit about life-time thinking. Korean thinks fetus is also human. So when they are born (Q. Can I omit \'they are\'?) , they are 1 year old because they spend almost 1 year in their mother\'s body. It is very thoughtful meaning.
So, I think Korean age is worthy of being kept and respected.
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Writing Task: Do you think South Koreans should be encouraged to stop using Korean age? Why? Why not?
Korean age is different from international age, so it maybe causes problem sometimes.
>>Korean age is different from international age, so sometimes it causes problems.
But, Korean age is Korean tradition.
>>But this is part of the Korean tradition.
And most of all, it has precious meaning.
>>And most of all, it has a precious meaning.
It is relation with Korean spirit about life-time thinking.
>>It is related with Korean spirit and the idea of life.
Korean thinks fetus is also human.
>>Koreans think that fetuses are human, too.
So when they are born (Q. Can I omit \'they are\'?) , they are 1 year old because they spend almost 1 year in their mother\'s body.
>>So when they are born, they are 1 year old. This is because they spend almost a year in their mother\'s body.
It is very thoughtful meaning.
>>It has a thoughtful meaning.
So, I think Korean age is worthy of being kept and respected.
>>So, I think Korean age is worth being kept and respected.
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