I agree with same-sex parenting.
학생이 쓴 원문
ESSAY: Should same-sex parenting be allowed? What is your stand?
As far as I know, there are many people who has a different sexual identify with others. Some of them love same sex. And some of them, they want to make a family with children. If they want to make a family with children, I would like to insist that our society should support them. The reason why i am thinking about that is all of the people have a right of freedom. That\'s given to all of the people. I think that we should respect the right all of people. So I agree with same-sex parenting.
강사 첨삭
Good evening Sir JY~! ^^ Thanks for answering your essay. For me, I don\'t agree with same-sex marriage. I have many reasons for that. Maybe we can talk about them when we have time in class. kkk Have a great night!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
As far as I know, there are many people who has a different sexual identify with others.
>>> As far as I know, there are many people who have different sexual identifications.
Some of them love same sex.
>>> Some of them love their same-sex.
And some of them, they want to make a family with children.
>>> And some of them want to build a family with children.
If they want to make a family with children, I would like to insist that our society should support them.
>>> CORRECT
The reason why i am thinking about that is all of the people have a right of freedom.
>>> The reason why I am thinking about that is all people have freedom of rights. ( Are you sure it\'s all about HUMAN RIGHTS? or HUMAN LIKES?)
That\'s given to all of the people.
>>> CORRECT
I think that we should respect the right all of people.
>>> I think we should respect human rights.
So I agree with same-sex parenting.
>>> CORRECT
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