I agree with that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need.
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ESSAY: Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I agree with that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need.
It is very easy for me to think about that. I can know it easily because my wife always buy something which is not needed for us. She can easily encourage by advertising within a few minutes. If she watch home shopping channel she always buy something.
So I think that advertising makes a people to buy something which is not really needed for their life.
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I agree with that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need.
>>> I agree that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need.
It is very easy for me to think about that.
It is very easy for me to think about that.
>>> CORRECT
I can know it easily because my wife always buy something which is not needed for us.
>>> I easily knew it because my wife always buys something unnecessary.
She can easily encourage by advertising within a few minutes.
>>> She is easily encouraged by advertisements within a few minutes.
If she watch home shopping channel she always buy something.
>>> If she watch home shopping channel she always buy something.
>>> If she watches home shopping channel she always buys something.
So I think that advertising makes a people to buy something which is not really needed for their life.
>>> So I think that advertisement makes people buy something which is not really needed for their life.
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