I agree with that Games are also important to adults.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Games are as important for adults as they are for children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I agree with that Games are also important to adults.

>> I agree that games are also important for adults.

>> OR: I agree that playing games are also important for adults.

Every one has high self-esteem about winning even they are audults.

>> Did you mean: Everyone has a high self-esteem about winning though they\'re already adults.

They also want to show their unordinary exceptional game abillity.

>> Did you mean: They also want to know their extraordinary abilities when playing a game.

>> OR: They want to know their special skills when playing a game.

If there are some battings, they will be fired up to be winner of the game.

>> Did you mean: If there are some battles, they will be fired up to be the winner of the game.

For example, my father usually plays baduk, seems like chess and his feeling depends on whether he is win or lose.

>> For example, my father usually plays \"Baduk\". It is similar to chess and his mood depends on whether he will win or lose the game.

>> OR: For example, my father usually plays \"Baduk\"  similar to chess and his mood depends on the result of the game.

Game goes wilder when there are money batting on it.
>> Did you mean: Games becomes more competitive when money is involved.

Of course, Getting good score is seemed like a game.

>> Of course, getting a good score is seemed like a game.

>> OR: Of course, getting a good score is felt like playing a game.

So many students study hard to become a winner in their own life.

>> So, many students study hard to become the winner in their own life.

>> OR: So, many students study hard to be the winner in their life.