I agree with that some activities after work can help to make a good relationship between colleagues
학생이 쓴 원문
> Is hanging out with colleagues after work actually helpful?
Yes. I agree with that some activities after work can help to make a good relationship between colleagues. If you are in an office you should concentrate to your work. If not you can\'t finish your work in time. So while you are in working time you don\'t have enough time to enjoy your time with your colleagues. If you want to have funny conversation or funny activities you should spend your time after work.
So I agree with that hanging out after work is helpful to make a good relationship between colleagues.
강사 첨삭
Hello Sir JY. Thank you once again for this. This is the reason you have an after work dinner or get together after work.
- T. Beth
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Yes. I agree with that some activities after work can help to make a good relationship between colleagues. >>> Yes, I agree that some activities after work can help to make a good relationship between colleagues.
If you are in an office you should concentrate to your work.
>>> If you are in the office, you should concentrate on your work.
If not you can\'t finish your work in time.
>>> correct
So while you are in working time you don\'t have enough time to enjoy your time with your colleagues.
>>> OR: So during your working time, you don\'t have enough time to enjoy with your colleagues.
If you want to have funny conversation or funny activities you should spend your time after work.
>>> If you want to have a fun conversation or do fun activities, you should spend your time on those after work.
So I agree with that hanging out after work is helpful to make a good relationship between colleagues.
>>> So I agree with that. Hanging out after work is helpful to make a good relationship between colleagues.
>>> OR: So I agree that hanging out after work is helpful to make a good relationship between colleagues.
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