I agree with the exception of some.

2023-05-30 · 첨삭 강사 Cathy

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I agree with the exception of some. In our country, men tend to have a little less economic efficiency because women start economic activities first because men have to be soldiers for a year or two. Also, women\'s physical standards are low when choosing people, perhaps because of physical differences. In Korea, female civil servants (firefighters, police officers, etc.) are women, so they work more comfortably than other male civil servants. When I hear these questions, I don\'t feel good. Because it seems to me that the conflict between men and women is deep. I think it is also important for each other to respect and understand each other. So men are more competitive than women, but they feel like they\'re similar because of the influence of society.

강사 첨삭

Hi Da [이름],

Thanks for sharing your thoughts on the topic. I appreciate your perspective. I understand that the conflict between men and women can be deep, and it\'s important to respect and understand each other. Men are generally more competitive, but societal norms also play a role in how they perceive themselves. Thanks for your input and participation in the discussion. It helps us learn from different viewpoints. Great job on your homework!

~Teacher Cathy

 

I agree with the exception of some.

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In our country, men tend to have a little less economic efficiency because women start economic activities first because men have to be soldiers for a year or two.

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OR>>In our country, men tend to have slightly lower economic efficiency compared to women, partly because women engage in economic activities earlier while men are required to serve in the military for a year or two.
Also, women\'s physical standards are low when choosing people, perhaps because of physical differences.

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OR>> Additionally, women may have lower physical standards when choosing partners, possibly due to physical differences.
In Korea, female civil servants (firefighters, police officers, etc.) are women, so they work more comfortably than other male civil servants.

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When I hear these questions, I don\'t feel good.

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Because it seems to me that the conflict between men and women is deep.

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I think it is also important for each other to respect and understand each other.
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OR>> I also believe it is important for individuals to respect and understand each other.
So men are more competitive than women, but they feel like they\'re similar because of the influence of society.

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