I arrived home at 00:00 am
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Hello, there!
I am so glad you felt good even if it was really scorching hot!
Yes, I agree that you must avoid heat stroke by gulping down lots of water^^
However, I am so sorry to know that airconditioners are banned in your workplace T^T
It must have been a challenge for you to work.. T^T
Anyway, thanks for asking such a wonderful question!
I think your company is thinking about how to conserve energy for our Mother Earth.
But for me, the workplace environment should also be considered!
If it is very uncomfortable to work somewhere, we can not be productive.
And, if we can\'t be productive, the company\'s image, and profit might get affected,too!
Now, let us see if you did your homework well:
1. I\'m off for two weeks _in_ August.
>>CORRECT!
2. The dog is asleep _under_ the tree.
>>CORRECT!
3. I have lived in this apartment _since_ 2001.
>>CORRECT!
4. My friend _at_ work is from Japan.
>>CORRECT!
5. I wake up _around_ 6 AM every morning.
>>CORRECT!
6. Thank you for telling me about this.
>>CORRECT!
7. Who did you buy this _from_?
>>CORRECT!
8. The factory workers have been _on_ strike since January.
>>CORRECT!
today was very hot.
>>It is very hot today.
even I feel a bit dizzy.
>>I even felt dizzy.
To evitate this, I have to drink much water.
>>To avoid this, I have to drink much water.
but I feel good. even in those environment.
>>But I feel good, even in this kind of environment.
I don\'t know why, just feel good today.
>>I don\'t know why, but I feel good today.
>>Since the sentences were short, we can combine them like:
>>I don\'t know why do I still feel good in this kind of environment.
But I arrived home now and feeling tired.
>>I have just arrived home and I am feeling tired.
Air conditioner which is placed in my room basically is banned.
>>The airconditioner which is basically placed in my room is banned.
because it is bellygod of electricity.
>>Because it eats up the electricity consumption.
>>NOTE: We can combine them again^^
>>The airconditioner which is basically placed in my room is banned because it eats up the electricity consumption.
Reducing electricity amount 15% less than last year is our goal.
>>Reducing the electricity usage by 15% less than last year is our goal.
but I think it is just goal, not reasonable one.
>>However, I think, it is just a goal, not a reasonable one.
It\'s important to reduce power used carelessly, which
>>It is important to reduce power consumption which is used carelessly.
It is more important to give a good work environment than.
>>NOTE:You were presenting choices so the sentence should be like this:
>>Is it important to reduce power consumption than to have a good working environment?
What would you do if you were in my position?
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