I bought a insurance policy
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I bought a insurance policy for my baby about to be born soon.
Recently my older sister start to work at the insurance company.
Therefor I decide to buy it from my sister instead of a insurance planner who sell several insurance to our family.
In fact she (the insurance planner not my sister) is good planner. She had dealt so many insurance issue clearly. So we our family were satisfied to her. We just talked to her only once when some issue happened by the phone.Then she did her work directly as we want without any additional call to our family. She even went to a wedding ceremony for a celebration. I always feel seeing her work that selling insurance is very difficult. I can not sell it only one.
My sister is starting her work while she have help from our family.
I might not be difficult yet. Family is a easy customer.
To sell a insurance to other, she have to work very hard and study herself more about her goods.
I wish my sister's business will do well.
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>> I bought/invested a life/medical insurance for my baby who is about to be born soon.
Recently my older sister start to work at the insurance company.
I might not be difficult yet.
To sell a insurance to other, she have to work very hard and study herself more about her goods.
Recently my older sister start to work at the insurance company.
>> Recently, my older sister started working at an insurance company.
Therefor I decide to buy it from my sister instead of a insurance planner who sell several insurance to our family.
Therefor I decide to buy it from my sister instead of a insurance planner who sell several insurance to our family.
>> So I decided to buy it from my sister instead to an insurance planner who sell several insurance to our family.
In fact she (the insurance planner not my sister) is good planner.
In fact she (the insurance planner not my sister) is good planner.
>> In fact, the insurance planner is a good one.
She had dealt so many insurance issue clearly. So we our family were satisfied to her.
>> She dealt with so many issues about insurance so my family was satisfied with her.
We just talked to her only once when some issue happened by the phone.
>> We just talked to her once over the phone about some issues that happened.
Then she did her work directly as we want without any additional call to our family.
>> Then she did her work exactly as we told her to do so with out any other calls to our family.
She even went to a wedding ceremony for a celebration.
>> Correct
>> OR: She even attended a wedding ceremony for a celebration.
I always feel seeing her work that selling insurance is very difficult.
>> I always feel that working as an insurance planner is very difficult.
I can not sell it only one.
>> If it was me, I would not be able to sell it to anybody.
My sister is starting her work while she have help from our family.
My sister is starting her work while she have help from our family.
>> My sister started working to help our family.
I might not be difficult yet.
>> It might not be difficult yet.
Family is a easy customer.
>> Your family could be your first customer.
To sell a insurance to other, she have to work very hard and study herself more about her goods.
>> In order for her to sell an insurance to others, he has to work very hard and learn more about the insurance.
I wish my sister\'s business will do well.
I wish my sister\'s business will do well.
>> Correct
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