I can live for one day without my mobile phone.
학생이 쓴 원문
I can live for one day without my mobile phone, because these day, I often in my house, but I can\'t live for two day without my mobile phone. If I don\'t have a mobile phone, I can\'t search the information I want to find, and I can\'t take a picture or I can\'t listen to the music. There is a very many function in the mobile phone like camera, gallery, kakao tok, and call, but if there is not mobile phone in my hand, I can\'t use these abb, so it will be dangerous, because I can\'t call to my parents, I can\'t use kakao tok. If theif is in my house, I have to call to my parents. Of course theif is not good, also they never have to come in my house, but if they come to my house I have to call to my parents.
강사 첨삭
You got it right Maria!
Having a phone means using it for emergency purposes especially before. Fast track to today, we use it more of entertainment and other important matters.
I think you can live without a phone if you have a tablet or a lap top. =)
See you tomorrow.
-T. Donna =)
>> I can live for one day without my mobile phone because these days I\'m often in my house. But, I can\'t live for two days without my mobile phone.
If I don\'t have a mobile phone, I can\'t search the information I want to find, and I can\'t take a picture or I can\'t listen to the music.
>> If I don\'t have a mobile phone, I can\'t search for the information I want to find and I can\'t take a picture or I can\'t listen to the music.
There is a very many function in the mobile phone like camera, gallery, kakao tok, and call, but if there is not mobile phone in my hand, I can\'t use these abb, so it will be dangerous, because I can\'t call to my parents, I can\'t use kakao tok.
>> There are very many functions in the mobile phone like the camera, gallery, Kakao Tok, and call, but if there is no mobile phone in my hand, I can\'t use these apps. So, it will be dangerous because I can\'t call to my parents. I can\'t use Kakao Tok.
If theif is in my house, I have to call to my parents. Of course theif is not good, also they never have to come in my house, but if they come to my house I have to call to my parents.
>> If a thief is in my house, I have to call to my parents. Of course the thief is not good. Also they never have to come in my house, but if they come to my house I have to call to my parents.
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