I can\'t believe still:(

2022-03-07 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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Please be careful to talk. I think every cases start yo begin at mouth. This in the war between Russia and Ukraine, only young people died. When I first saw that news, I think just how could they do that... Young people they don\'t know every thing just the war broke out at the place where they thought it was only training. I can\'t believe still. Now is 2022 but people they are still same a long time ago.

강사 첨삭

Hi Ann!
 
I agree with you. Nothing good will come out from wars. It will not make anything better. They are just risking lives of innocent people. 

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Please be careful to talk.
>> We need to be careful with what we say. 

I think every cases start yo begin at mouth.
>> I think every war starts because of what people say. 

This in the war between Russia and Ukraine, only young people died.
>> Only young people died between the war or Ukraine and Russia, 

When I first saw that news, I think just how could they do that...
>> When I first saw it in the news, I was wondering how could they do such thing. 

Young people they don\'t know every thing just the war broke out at the place where they thought it was only training.
>> Young people don\'t know anything about wars since they were not trained. 

I can\'t believe still. Now is 2022 but people they are still same a long time ago.
>> I still can\'t believe it. It\'s already 2022 and people are still the same. 

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