I\'d like to have a Russian Blue cat.(part 2)

2019-09-02 · 첨삭 강사 Matt

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The loud noises will make stress. So the floor beneath us and us will have a fight. So I think Russian Blues are good choices for apartments. Third, they don\'t make any fur problems. Most cats fur fly a lot. However, the Russian Blue\'s fur does not fly a lot, because their furs are more shorter. So, mom will be happier because she does not have to clean the furs often. In conclusion I would like to have a Russian Blue because of 3 reasons. First, Russian blues are loyal. Second ,they don\'t make loud noises. Third, they don\'t make any fur problems. You might think that cats poop all over the house but, in fact, No! Cats are very clean animals. So they poop at ther sand baskets. No need to worry! I really want to have a Russian Blue because of these reasons. Let\'s cross our fingers for the best. Now, it\'s time to say bye. Bye, Bye!

강사 첨삭

Hello, Rose! Good morning and happy Monday ahead! Thank you for this. Please, don\'t hesitate o send me more, if you have. Have a good day ahead. See you in class!
-T.Matt
The loud noises will make stress.
>>The loud noises can be stressful.
So the floor beneath us and us will have a fight.
>>The floor beneath us might get angry.
So I think Russian Blues are good choices for apartments.
>>So, I think Russian Blues are good choices for apartments.
Third, they don\'t make any fur problems.
>>Third, they don\'t give fur-related problems.
Most cats fur fly a lot.
>>Most cats\' fur shed a lot.
However, the Russian Blue\'s fur does not fly a lot, because their furs are more shorter.
>>However, the Russian Blue\'s fur does not shed often because they have shorter fur.
So, mom will be happier because she does not have to clean the furs often. 
>>Correct
In conclusion I would like to have a Russian Blue because of 3 reasons.
>>In conclusion, I would like to have a Russian Blue because of 3 reasons.
>>In conclusion, I would like to have a Russian Blue because of three reasons.
First, Russian blues are loyal.
>>Correct
Second ,they don\'t make loud noises.
>>Correct
Third, they don\'t make any fur problems.
>>Third, they don\'t give fur-related problems.
You might think that cats poop all over the house but, in fact, No! Cats are very clean animals.
>>Correct
So they poop at ther sand baskets.
>>They poop at their sand baskets.
>>They poop in their litter boxes.
No need to worry
>>Correct
I really want to have a Russian Blue because of these reasons.
>>Correct
Let\'s cross our fingers for the best.
>>Correct
Now, it\'s time to say bye. 
>>Correct
Bye, Bye!
>>Correct

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