I\'d like to live in an old city.

2020-11-04 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

학생이 쓴 원문

I\'ve been a lot of interested in a history and an old great people of many country. So I want to say I prefer to live in an old city than a more modern one. Now I imagine dwelling in the old and beautiful countryside. There, I can see an antique houses, trees, buildings with history and hear beautiful music etc. At the thought of it, I am happy.

강사 첨삭

H[이름]!
I like your choice of words in this composition.
They were used in such a smart way that I really admire it.
I changed some of the patterns of your sentences to make them clearer.
These patterns are commonly used in writing and speaking.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon 
I\'ve been a lot of interested in a history and an old great people of many country. 
>> I\'ve always been interested in history and great people of many countries.
So I want to say I prefer to live in an old city than a more modern one.
>> So, I want to say that I prefer to live in an old city than a more modern one.
Now I imagine dwelling in the old and beautiful countryside. 
>> Correct
There, I can see an antique houses, trees, buildings with history and hear beautiful music etc.
>> There I can see antique houses, trees and historical buildings and I can also listen to beautiful music and a lot more.
At the thought of it, I am happy.
>> I feel happy just at the thought of it. 

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