I\'d rather swim in a pool
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I rather swim in a pool. Because pool is safe than beach.I can\'t swim very well so when I swim in the beach, my body always frozen. But when I swim in pool, I can know that pool is how much deep so I can swim comfortably. Then, pool is more clear than beach. When I swim in beach, often some trash or seafood float in beach. But when I swim in pool, pool is clear and look like emerald. I like swim in beach but swim in pool is much better.
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I rather swim in a pool.
>> Correct
Because pool is safe than beach.
>> It\'s because the pool is safer than the beach.
I can\'t swim very well so when I swim in the beach, my body always frozen.
>> I can\'t swim very well so when I swim at the beach, my body always freezes up.
But when I swim in pool, I can know that pool is how much deep so I can swim comfortably.
>> However, when I swim in the pool, I can see how deep it is so I can swim comfortably.
Then, pool is more clear than beach.
>> The water in the pool is also clearer than the one at the beach.
When I swim in beach, often some trash or seafood float in beach.
>> When I swim at the beach, I can often see some trash or seafood floating in the water.
But when I swim in pool, pool is clear and look like emerald.
>> However, when I swim in the pool, the water is clear and it looks like emerald.
I like swim in beach but swim in pool is much better.
>> I like swim[이름]g at the beach but swim[이름]g in the pool is much better.
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